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● 金子みすゞさんの詩情とその英訳
（英文校閲：Frances Ford）
93.おほリのそば
おほリのそばでおうたけど、
知らぬかおして水みてた。
きのう、けんかはしたけれど、
きょうはなんだかなつかしい。
にっとわらってみたけれど、
知らぬ顔して水みてた。
わらった顔はやめられず、
つッと、なみだも、止められず、
わたしはたったとかけ出した、
小石が縞になるほどに。
（添削）
By the Moat
Though I saw the girl by the moat,
she kept watching the water.
Yesterday I quarreled with her
but today I sort of miss her.
I smiled sweetly at her,
but she kept watching the water,
putting on a show of ignorance.
I couldn't stop the smiling (in a) [⇒of the] moment
nor a shedding of tears,
then abruptly I, like a hundred (of削除) bricks,
dashed (out削除) away so violently
that the pebbles at my feet were stripe-patterned.
（できあがり）
By the Moat
Though I saw the girl by the moat,
she kept watching the water.
Yesterday I quarreled with her
but today I sort of miss her.
I smiled sweetly at her,
but she kept watching the water,
putting on a show of ignorance.
I couldn't stop the smiling of the moment
nor a shedding of tears,
then abruptly I, like a hundred bricks,
dashed away so violently
that the pebbles at my feet were stripe-patterned.
94.けんかのあと
ひとりになった
一人になった。
むしろの上はさみしいな。
わたしは知らない
あの子が先よ。
だけどもだけども、さみしいな。
お人形さんも
ひとりになった。
お人形だいても、さみしいな。
あんずの花が
ほろりほろり。
むしろの上はさみしいな。
（添削）
After a Quarrel
Now I'm alone,
only one
left (lonely) [⇒alone] on the straw mat.
I have nothing to do with the matter;
She was the first to have done something wrong;
All the same, still I feel lonesome.
Now my doll as well
is left alone;
The doll in my arms
makes me all the more lonesome.
Apricot flowers scatteringly drop
on the mat left (lonely) [⇒alone].
（できあがり）
After a Quarrel
Now I'm alone,
only one
left alone on the straw mat.
I have nothing to do with the matter;
She was the first to have done something wrong;
All the same, still I feel lonesome.
Now my doll as well
is left alone;
The doll in my arms
makes me all the more lonesome.
Apricot flowers scatteringly drop
on the mat left alone.
95.べえこ
ひい、ふう、みい、よ、ふみ切りで
みんなして貨車を数えてた。
いつ、むう、ななつ、八つ目の、
貨車にべえこが乗っていた。
売られてどこへ行くんだろ、
べえこばかしで乗っていた。
夕風つめたいふみ切リで、
みんなして貨車を見おくった。
ばんにゃどうしてねるんだろう、
母さん牛はいなかった。
どこヘべえこは行くんだろ、
ほんとにどこへ行くんだろ。
（添削）
Calves
"One, two, three," (reckoned we all) [⇒we all reckoned]
the number of [cars of挿入] a passing train at the crossing;
We kept counting, "five, six, seven;"
Look! )On) [⇒Aboard] the eighth car we saw calves (aboard削除).
I wondered where they were, (after sale) [⇒after being sold],
to
be
taken.
They were but calves.
At the railway crossing in the cold windy evening
we all saw the freight train off.
I wondered how they were to be rocked to sleep at night;
They were motherless.
Now I wonder where they are to be taken;
I('m削除) seriously worried about where they are to be taken.
（できあがり）
Calves
"One, two, three," we all reckoned
the number of cars of a passing train at the crossing;
We kept counting, "five, six, seven;"
Look! Aboard the eighth car we saw calves.
I wondered where they were, after being sold, to be taken.
They were but calves.
At the railway crossing in the cold windy evening
we all saw the freight train off.
I wondered how they were to be rocked to sleep at night;
They were motherless.
Now I wonder where they are to be taken;
I seriously worried about where they are to be taken.
いいじゃないか
人間だもの
Stumbling
does not matter;
to err is human.
[It's ok to stumble, isn't it
we are humans after all]
なるべくなら
うそのないほう
がいい
If possible,
stay free of
falsehood.
なやみは
つきないな
生きているんだもの
The worries of life
are endless
because we exist.
いいことはおかげ
さま わるいことは
身から出たさび
"Well done!" should be attributed
to unseen help from Heaven;
"Badly done!"
to an ill life, an ill end.
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